Why are you in a confronted mindset..? You painted the Senryu differently but your subconscious wanted it different I guess.. Hmm.. An open interpretation.. I sense awkwardness..A Smile in anger.. Distance from your world. .. Yet always cropping up in the night..(Star)..it could be also be reverse.. You know the light version.. Senryu.. Are like that.. But if i have to guess.. You try to undertone it.. To give it the ‘light’ meaning.. But as poetry is like breathing to you.. Your subconscious didn’t allow that.. So you left it with clues of the real one.. The awkward interpretation.. But I could be wrong..
But even the confrontation is surreal.. But why did you undertone it.. And Senryu are so hard.. Listen to this one,
Fire burning
Women encircling
Men smiling..
I thought it was pretty clear when i wrote it.. And people thought i was presenting tribal dance.. But I am intrigued by your expression.. In writing..
Yours is so direct. Maybe I want my reader to use his imagination. You can’t tell all. Our readers are intelligent π€, you know. It should get them to think , me thinks.
And to think half of those who read it.. Compared it to tribal dance and happiness.. Come on.. It could also mean the silent agony of women as they are being forced by men but no.. Tribal dance.. Dance.. What the hell is that suppose to mean.. I mean look at that senryu of yours.. Some might call it lovely or good or beautiful.. Reading the face value.. Ignoring the world like blaze.. Star(distance) and smile(cynical or creepy).. But at least no one will call it presenting a common demeanour.. Sorry for babbling.. I had a bad day.. I should stop now.. But seriously.. Why did you change it..the demeanour of your Senryu..?
A collaboration: A cleaved haiku, i think you’ll like it? Would like to see it here first? Remember you wont see the cleavers just a distinct gap on the blog, p l e a s e, fingers crossed
yaskhan 
:):):) So beautiful!!
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I so thank you, loved one.
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It really is. I don’t know how you do it
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I am glad you like it, Maggie girl.
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love it π
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Thank you, Soul.
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You are most welcome, lovely
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π€
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Wow….beautiful Yassy
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Thank you, Michnavs.
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Lovely. I see your smile in these words.
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Thank you, P!
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Unique one π
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Thank you, D!
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Good evening π
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A very good evening to you , Ugur!
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Thank you, it is here again in the evening. Greetings from Turkey. π
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It’s half past nine in the evening, hope you are well.
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I’m fine. I hope you’ll be fine and even perfect. π
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Oh ! I am good! Thank you. I would love to visit Turkey.
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Turkey is great. You’ll be happy here π
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I know ! Thanks so much.
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Thanks π
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Beautiful!
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Thank you, Cadbury.
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Most welcome, Yastrzemski!
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What is that?π³
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Auto correct π
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Nah, still didn’t?
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Haha, no, I mean it my auto correct which added such flare to your name.
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Oh ! π
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This is really pretty, Yassy.
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Aw! Thank you, Robbie. Felt like writing something light.
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niceeeee
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Thankx.
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Beautiful piece. You always amaze me….how you can say so much in so few words.
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How romantic!
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Thank you, Scalia.
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Sorry Swalia
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Why are you in a confronted mindset..? You painted the Senryu differently but your subconscious wanted it different I guess.. Hmm.. An open interpretation.. I sense awkwardness..A Smile in anger.. Distance from your world. .. Yet always cropping up in the night..(Star)..it could be also be reverse.. You know the light version.. Senryu.. Are like that.. But if i have to guess.. You try to undertone it.. To give it the ‘light’ meaning.. But as poetry is like breathing to you.. Your subconscious didn’t allow that.. So you left it with clues of the real one.. The awkward interpretation.. But I could be wrong..
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Yes, but I don’t lose my sense of focus whatever ! It’s all up there I guess, in the mind , creeps into the heart sometimes but I can handle it
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But even the confrontation is surreal.. But why did you undertone it.. And Senryu are so hard.. Listen to this one,
Fire burning
Women encircling
Men smiling..
I thought it was pretty clear when i wrote it.. And people thought i was presenting tribal dance.. But I am intrigued by your expression.. In writing..
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Yours is so direct. Maybe I want my reader to use his imagination. You can’t tell all. Our readers are intelligent π€, you know. It should get them to think , me thinks.
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No, but you do understand what the Senryu was about don’t you.. And i thought Karai.. Was straightforward in his expression..
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Yup. I got that. Let’s thrash it out lol
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And to think half of those who read it.. Compared it to tribal dance and happiness.. Come on.. It could also mean the silent agony of women as they are being forced by men but no.. Tribal dance.. Dance.. What the hell is that suppose to mean.. I mean look at that senryu of yours.. Some might call it lovely or good or beautiful.. Reading the face value.. Ignoring the world like blaze.. Star(distance) and smile(cynical or creepy).. But at least no one will call it presenting a common demeanour.. Sorry for babbling.. I had a bad day.. I should stop now.. But seriously.. Why did you change it..the demeanour of your Senryu..?
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I don’t know π€·ββοΈ, I just write. It’s my medicine for all my ailments.
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OK alright.. Sorry for babbling really… I will stop.. With my persistence…
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It’s okay , don’t worry , you are not babbling. You take care. See you in a bit
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Yassy, you shine so bright! π«
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And you blaze
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Beautiful and heartwarming yassy.
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Thank you, Davy.
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Adore that logo
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Thank you yassy. It is the Japanese kanji for Owl, which has been a guide for me for many years now.
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Really. Very interesting.
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There is a whole story behind it and I may tell it one day yassy.
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Yeah. π
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A collaboration: A cleaved haiku, i think you’ll like it? Would like to see it here first? Remember you wont see the cleavers just a distinct gap on the blog, p l e a s e, fingers crossed
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Yeah. Great.
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You should have a pingback on it now?
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Hip hip hurray
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Lovely
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