Lovely! ‘dying colours of the day,’ fragrance of bruised petals’, ‘scent of a good bye’all packed so crisply in just four lines! Awesome imagery and craftsmanship!
Love the imagery you create with the “fragrance of bruised petals” being “the scent of goodbye”.
The way I interpret it, and if I’m close then it’s something I believe, that, there is a certain beauty in the way things come to an end just like there is love in letting go as well. No?
WOW!
“fragrance of bruised petals
the scent of a goodbye”
Seriously brought a tear to my eye.
My first 2 inspired by yours, the others been in my archives since December 2016
made me feel lonely sad night
read loved and reread again
loneliness beat a shout heard
my wife not asleep
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dusk settingsun goodbye day
dark clouds fly dappling moonlight
shadows dance to subtle base
natures orchestras
—-
frantic gasps voice begging help
inadequate attendants
forlorn now long drawn-out breaths
stranded whale lays dead
—-
bird cherries not yet in bloom
awaiting spring winter still holds
feed the birds keeps them happy
flu still prevailing
That made me cry. Yes , these dodoitstsus are fabulous, you can turn your hand to anything , and very good at it. Hope you posted , will check. Regards to the missus ! Thank you for writing Mick.
Aw! I do all the time, in fact I have to take a walk, night or day, just so I don’t upset anybody else. Again thank you for your kind supportive words, and yes posted, thanks again,
yaskhan 
Beautiful words yassy. I have never encountered the Dodoitsu before, so thank you for the introduction 🙂
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Another fantastic Japanese form of poetry. Thank you for reading Davy. Always value your views
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I’ve quietly enjoyed your poems here Yassy, now just got reliable internet! Love this one 🙂
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Missed your presence. How is it going there? You will be back in march , if am not mistaken.
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Beautiful,Yasmin….fell in love with ‘fragrance of bruised petals,
the scent of a goodbye’
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Thank you Vidur so much.
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You are very welcome.
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Lovely! ‘dying colours of the day,’ fragrance of bruised petals’, ‘scent of a good bye’all packed so crisply in just four lines! Awesome imagery and craftsmanship!
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Thank you Sir.
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Love the imagery you create with the “fragrance of bruised petals” being “the scent of goodbye”.
The way I interpret it, and if I’m close then it’s something I believe, that, there is a certain beauty in the way things come to an end just like there is love in letting go as well. No?
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Yep. So many ways to interpret, depends on the state of mind , but you got that ! I like the way you analyze. You get to the heart of the verse.
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Good poetry does that to me. I go into my dissect-the-poem mode. Lol.
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I like that. Leaves place for improvement.
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Very moving, Yassy!
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Thank you Robbie!
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love reading your work, it’s always a pleasure 🙂
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Thank you dear friend. I am delighted that you like my work. My inspiration to write.
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Intersting poetic form
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Thank you Iris
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🙂
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Sorry for the first comment. Interesting poetic form… lovely write.
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Thank you once again Iris.
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A pleasure, Yassy. 🙂
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😊
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I’ve just got back from a days thinking in France, Lady Yasmin and this is the first thing I’ve read. The thing is you’ve got my mind of words.
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I am sure it all went well , waiting for Wednesday, Lord Zoolon.
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What happened to Barcelona? Untrue, surely.
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Wistful, and very beautiful.
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Thank you
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Sad… a sigh and a goodbye. Not a dry eye.
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Yeah. ! 😭how was your week
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It had its highlights and lowlights. How about yours?
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I will survive.
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Hey I Nominated Your blog for the Blog Recognition Award.Here is the link
https://ujjwalrealblog.wordpress.com/2017/02/15/blogger-recognition-award/
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Thank you Ujjwal. Am honored.
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Welcome yassy
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WOW!
“fragrance of bruised petals
the scent of a goodbye”
Seriously brought a tear to my eye.
My first 2 inspired by yours, the others been in my archives since December 2016
made me feel lonely sad night
read loved and reread again
loneliness beat a shout heard
my wife not asleep
—-
dusk settingsun goodbye day
dark clouds fly dappling moonlight
shadows dance to subtle base
natures orchestras
—-
frantic gasps voice begging help
inadequate attendants
forlorn now long drawn-out breaths
stranded whale lays dead
—-
bird cherries not yet in bloom
awaiting spring winter still holds
feed the birds keeps them happy
flu still prevailing
My first WP published dodoitsu, still not sure?
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That made me cry. Yes , these dodoitstsus are fabulous, you can turn your hand to anything , and very good at it. Hope you posted , will check. Regards to the missus ! Thank you for writing Mick.
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Aw! I do all the time, in fact I have to take a walk, night or day, just so I don’t upset anybody else. Again thank you for your kind supportive words, and yes posted, thanks again,
Mick
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I like walking too , with music. Aha I am a loner !
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Delighted with these, Mick at his usual best.
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A beautiful and fragrant verse.
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Thank you Tom
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I like the bruised petal image.
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Thanh you Forrresr
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Emotional in its brevity lies its strength your stuff is not in my reader grrr
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Thank you Robbie. Happens to me all the time , I follow but I can’t see their posts , have to bear lol.
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I love form poetry. Need to look into it. I’m crazy about the sestina. BTW your work is best I’ve read so far.
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Thank you very much.
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