Dawn breaks over the eastern sky A blazed zephyr carries birds' chorale To the stars and the moon, a goodbye. On the horizon, tequila sun sighs Lending verve to day's morale Dawn breaks over the eastern sky. Starlight ditties of lullaby Give way to a cerulean royale To the stars and the moon, a goodbye. Chirping on my window-sill, a magpie Feathered choirs, so mystic, surreal Dawn breaks over the eastern sky. Rosette tints radiate, magnify A lilac sky swathes to reveal To the stars and the moon, a goodbye. Solar ripples intensify Sparking a luminous appeal Dawn breaks over the eastern sky To the moon and the stars, a goodbye. # A Villanelle poem.
wow, why are you so good at this?
I really enjoyed this style. I may try it out, too. . .
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Joey , thank you 😊
I don’t know if I am really good but I try because like poetry , it’s a creative challenge, and I think 🤔 you will write a fantastic villanelle.
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I’d love to do a collab just to learn from you, but I think it’d be a dis-service for you, at least where I’m at now, haha
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Yeah, I think it would be wonderful to do a collab with you. I like what I have read of your work.
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Excellent… I’m honored!
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😊🌝
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Feel free to reach out to me anytime on my poetry email. We can talk specifics and get a collab going. . . thepoetryaboutus@gmail.com
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Yeah, give me some time. As soon as I am able to .
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I’m busy too, so that’s fine 🙂
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Yeah, I understand, but I hope to write with you.
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I just hope to not let you down!
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Hey , come on, don’t be silly , you can’t talk like that. Don’t ever underestimate yourself. Cheers buddy 😊🌞
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Cheers. Look forward to hearing from you buddy 🙂
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A gorgeous villanelle by any name!
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Thank you 😊, Holly 🤗
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my pleasure, this is a joy to read! 🤗
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😊🌝🙏🏼🙋🏻
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😊🌝🙏🏼👩🏻🦰
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Hugs 🤗
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Hugs back 🤗🤗
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Magpies are my favourite birds. A wonderful poem, Yasmin. You captured the moment ~ George
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They look sleekly elegant and are one of the non~mammal creatures able to recognize itself in a mirror test .
Thank you , George .
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It’s good that Magpies mate for life as well ~ George
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Great writing!
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Thank you, Poet and thank you for the follow 😊
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Welcome!
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Its beautiful Yassy..
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Thank you, Mich! How have you been my dear?
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Been busy with motherhood lol..
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🙋🏻
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Love the image it conjures
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Thank you 😊 🌝
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Beautiful!!!!
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Thank you sweet Tara😊🙋🏻
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A villanelle stands or falls on two lines – the ones which repeat throughout the poem. Write two good repeating lines, as here, and you have a strong framework to support your poem.
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Thank you for your feedback. 😊🙂
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A magnetism of beauty and the word choices are incredible and moving. 🙂
Miss reading your work, Yassy. 🙂
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Thank you 😊, Charlie.
So good to see you 🙂
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You are welcome, Yassy.
Your work brings a smile to my face. 🙂
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😊🙂
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That’s gorgeous, Yassy! I could feel the sunrise…my whole body read that poem. You captured the experience perfectly!!! Thank You and Cheers! 🤗❤️😊
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You are so very sweet , sweetheart, bless you 🌝😘
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🤗❤️😊
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🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗
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I am always in such awe of how wonderfully you write. Transporting me to a better place when I am sad, to warmth when I am cold, to an appreciation of things when I feel there is none. I don’t even know if “awe” is sufficient to describe the happiness you bring dear sweet Yassy. You are such a blessing to me, more than you will ever know. Much love to you dear soul 🙂 You give so much.
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You are such a pure soul my dearest friend. I feel pain when you say the words sad and cold , I want my soul sister to be the happiest , I want her to be smiling always and I can picture your dear face as I write. Our bonding is binding and infinite and I send you warm hugs and lots of love. It’s as if we are near , we are in spirit and that is so relevant and wonderful.
You take good care of yourself. Eat properly and sleep well.
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Now I am going to Love Hug and kiss
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I could see it all! Beautiful written!
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Thank you ☺️
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Stunning piece, Yassy! Bravo!
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Thank you sweetheart 😊🤗
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You’re welcome, Yassy! 😉
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😊🤗❤️
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This is so pretty. I could see the breathtaking picture you painted with your heart touching words . You’re a genius honey . Xoxoxo
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Thank you sweetheart 🤗😘
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Loved it ❤️
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Thank you ☺️
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👏👏👏❤
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🙋🏻
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Your talent sparkles!!
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Thank you and so does yours. I read your work and you are amazing!
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Ohhh, bless your heart, dear–thank you!! I wonder if you’ve tried “magnetic poetry”? It’s addictive fun!
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What is that , Lazul?
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Here’s the link: http://play.magneticpoetry.com/poem/Original/kit/. It’s a free on-line site where you get a bunch of words to make a poem from. And you can click on Original, Poet, Love and something else–for varieties of topic words. Have a look, I bet you’ll love it as much as I do 🙂
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Ok thanks.
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You’re most welcome!
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😊🙂
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❤ ❤
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🙋🏻
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I have no idea what that little image means, sorry 🙂
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That is me sending a shout out to ya
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Okay, thank you dear heart ❤ Blessings to you!
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Happy weekend to you😊
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Thank you So Much–you too, sweetie!!
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😊🌞
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lovely!
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Thank you 😊
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That’s gorgeous!!!
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Thank you, Louisa.
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What a gorgeous poem, Yassy. Well done.
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Thank you my dear 🤗
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Lyrical magical and mysterious. Anand Bose from Kerala
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Thank you 🙏🏼
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Simply lovely!
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Thank you 😊
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I love a good villanelle. Nice job with the colorful imagery!
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Thanks 😊
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Gorgeous Yassy!
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Thank you, where have you been? Missed you.
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Sorting through some stuff which all seemed very important at the time – maybe it was – I am so glad to be back and writing – feels great – missed you too – it feels like home you know – when you get back to yourself and what you’re supposed to be doing 😊
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Welcome back. Good to see you here. Stay stay 😊🌞
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Not going anywhere this time Yassy 😊
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😊❤️🙋🏻
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I like this!
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Thank you ☺️
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I featured you in GDGC promote a poet – https://godoggocafe.com/2019/10/24/promote-a-poet-writer-thursday-october-24-2019/comment-page-1/#comment-38696
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Thank you , Eugenia. It’s so very kind of you and I am deeply honoured and to tell you the truth I needed this.
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“To the moon and stars, goodby” What a beautiful last line! A follower of yours recommended your blog! I am happy to have the chance to read your work again! Keep up the great work!
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Thank you, I think Eugenia has been kind enough to recommend my work.
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These words paint the most peaceful picture. 🖤
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🙏🏼❤️
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Reblogged this on By the Mighty Mumford.
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