Sunbeams trace the blush of my cheeks evanescing the tranquil pace of my breath I clutch the quietness nestling my private lair Hushed in tender warmth of eventide's lull Luna's rosette glow embosses quietude Crowning twilight's veil. Whiff of twinkling stardust Floats from a mellow sky Unfolding amber prints on lea Like vintage violin strains On dew's delicate wisp Illumined by shooting stars Beguiling a promise The promise of a poem Echoing radiance of the Milky Way.
This is beautiful. Now tell me how do you do it?
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Thank you , Sunil π
I just like to write poetry or atleast I try and I am thankful for your appreciation.
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That’s what most of us are doing but not everyone can be that good. You deserve appreciation.
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I am honored π
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This is quite beautiful, Yassy π
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Thank you , Neha ! Happy weekend sweetiepieπ
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You’re welcome! You have a great weekend ahead too β€
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what a treat this is to read, delectable words unfolding every line.
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Thank you ππ that comment was my weekend treat. Thank you.
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have a good one! with rainbows and smileys…
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You have a good weekend too πΊ
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Beautiful.
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Thank you thank you ππ
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You are welcome. βΊβΊ
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Your poetry has an ethereal and celestial quality that is so beautiful! I especially love….”the tranquil pace of my breath”.
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My dear ink that flowers so beautifully , I so thank you for your awesome comment.
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The promise of this gorgeous poem is already echoing in my heart! You are the most radiant star of the Milky Way!
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Thank you to my queen of verses. If you appreciate my work , I am thrilled ππ
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Oh, you know I love your work! π·πΉπΊπ
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And I love yours πΉπΈπ·πΊ
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Be well.
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You too!
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Another beautiful poem by you
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Thank you , Bπ
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My pleasure
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A lovely poem to brighten up an afternoon with a grey cloudy sky overhead!
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Thank you , David. Hope the sun shines on you tomorrow. But, the grey cloudy sky sounds cozy. Snuggle in with a book.
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Oh dear Yassy.
How have you been?
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I am good , D. Thank you for asking. Hope all is well with you. It’s ages since I read you
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SO so so beautiful!!
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Thank you, Tara.
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Another out of this world post Yassy, this was beautifully written and your wording was amazingly lovely. I couldnβt pull myself away from this, you are magical with a pen my friendπ«
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Thank you , for me you will always be Jo Wo, the brainy brainiac guy. Will check in on you and your golden girl.
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You are out of this world amazing Yassy, your shine illuminates WP. π«π«
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I am not sure why, but this poem reads like the faint and muffled tones of a distant piano through a dark, isolated night. I don’t know, but that is where this poem puts me.
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Your comment is a poignant one. I feel and know what you mean. Thank you , Sahana.
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To every action, there is a consequence. How does Adaora comprehend the aftermath of a murder erroneously committed?
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Hey, Sheriff, I read the link , very fascinating and intriguing.
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Thanks… please help me share the link to friends and family. Ensure to also download a copy for yourself thanks.
It’s my new Book.
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Will tweet the link.
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Loved this line: Whiff of twinkling stardust. Thanks for sharing your talent as always! π
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Thank you ππΊ
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Wonderful!
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Thank you π
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Last 2 lines…superb!!
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Thanks , K! Thu kaisaa hey?
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Doing ok.. mixed emotions today… daughter leaves for higher studies
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It’s okay. Here, sending you my shoulder … and Kleenex.
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This is beautifully descriptive, yassy.
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Thank you , Robbie.
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Good Lord, Yassy! That’s so beautiful!!! π
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Thank you π
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My pleasure! π
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Thank you so very much for such beautiful, POSITIVE lines.
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You welcome , I am honored and delighted.
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I like most the poems participation in a great tradition of the poem promising yet another poem; figures of speech are nice. Perhaps allow yourself an organic cohesion between those figures.
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Thank you for the feedback. I like to impr
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I like to improve on my writin. Could you elaborate on the last line of your comment.
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I think you might let this very nice poem stand as is. Then try your hand at free verse poetry. Free verse does not mean sloppy verse. It means being entirely aware of the entirety of the poem–internal rhyme–sound devices such that the sound amplifies the meaning–using rhythms to indicate where internally sound takes shape–leave the usual end rhymes out, but not entirely; use them to amplify as you would with meaning. Begin with simile and metaphor forming the scaffolding of internal sound. Just get my attention–I can be there as others might need some of my language.
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Thank you. Will keep this in mind when I write my next.
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So glorious, refinement of excellence, go get your MFA creative writing/poetry, I underestimated you! I suggest Colorado State University, where I went, while you are at it take a look at my blogs.
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Thank you very much.
I can’t open your blog. I get an error message. Please help
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