moonbeams dance on my pillow this unknown summer night venus blooms like cereus in an ebony sky a hushed wind carries My dreams to you I pick up my pen...
moonbeams dance on my pillow this unknown summer night venus blooms like cereus in an ebony sky a hushed wind carries My dreams to you I pick up my pen...
Beautiful and captivating – Iβm in love with your imagery.
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Thank you , Rose!
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Thanks for visiting my blog. All the best with your writing. I love moonbeams,
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Thank you
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Your way with words sings
The music adds more magic
See it everywhere
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Words are everywhere ,
you can see it , feel it, like music
I hear your words.
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replies are echoes
once the vibrations align
then they become dance
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Your comments are poetry. A haiku dance , I think you do Basho proud.
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You have given me so many examples of fluidity, smoothness, and impact. Your word choices spark my replies. Thank you.
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Thank you , Von π. Your comment made me smile.
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nice poem well done from kevin
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Thank you.
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your welcome
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This is all so wonderful! Love the thought of moonbeams dancing on a pillow, venus blooming…encouraging you to pick up your pen…
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Thank you sweet Theresa.
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Beautiful madam π
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Thank you, Sir.
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Beautiful!!! Put a rush through me. Cheers! π
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Thank you. Have a safe and peaceful year.
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Thank You, Yassy. You too! π
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I want to say a big thank for contributing to THE VOICES. It is more than an honour to have your contribution. To empower your work on this journal, it is required that you send your profile and web link to our email info@giftedminds.com.ng
The profile is not expected to be more than 300 words.
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The first few lines and you made an impact! This is real free verse with a zing.
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Thank you , OneLifeπ
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how endearing, beautifully written π
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Thank you π
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You are on a hot streak!
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Oh wow, thank you π
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Lyrics in action. I like how the poem captures the present and makes that very moment its own creation. The poem remains alive even after the reading stops. Not a single word is extra. The train of imagery is beautiful, travelling through a land of reality, mythology, nature, dreams and coming back to its source in the end. Enthusiastic to read more of your works.
Also, thanks for viewing my work. It would be wonderful to have any remarks or suggestions for the same. If you find my work intriguing, please don’t shy away from visiting my infant website for academic content- https://therealmofliterature.wordpress.com and my baby blog for creative content- https://svayamwriteson.wordpress.com
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Yes, agree with this review. Transitioning between reality and dream is most accomplished in this piece. The elements of nature like the moonbeams, the sky, the summer night and the wind establish this connection so beautifully expressed. And “not a single word is extra”. Love the concision and the power this poem has. The image of moonbeams dancing on a pillow provides a great opening. It gives the poem wings and beauty. At the same time it is the first bridge between reality and the world of dreams. Isn’t dancing also associated with our dreams and desires? Also, I like the air of mystery with the “unknown summer night”. “Venus blooms like cereus” provides beauty with thorns. I am wondering about this. If Venus stands for Love perhaps this hints at some relationship where someone was deeply hurt or not reciprocated? Well, it’s just personal interpretation. In any case, the image of cereus and that of the “ebony sky” bring the feeling of texture in your piece, which is wonderful. So sensual and delightful when you can taste a poem with many of your senses. “A hushed wind” is a lovely image too for its beautiful contrast. It makes the reader think and helps maintain the air of mystery. The last verse is a total change where, after the persona has been contemplating the transitions between reality and dreams, he or she decides to take action and grab a pen. A lovely piece, Yassy!
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You are very perceptive and I love the way you have interpreted my poem. Thank you for this beautiful, wonderful comment.
What a magnificent magnanimous heart you have.
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I love literature and poetry, that is all. Besides, you are very talented and it is always a pleasure to come back to your blog.
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I write because of readers like you and I am very grateful for your appreciation!
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The feeling is mutual.
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Reblogged this on Spiritual Challenges.
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Thank you , Maxima.
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Beautiful imagery. Short and evocative. Loved the opener, Moonbeams dance on my pillow.
Would love it if you could comment and give me feedback on my poetry.
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Thank you so much.
I am sorry , when I clicked on your name, I couldn’t find your blog.
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Try urmilamahajan.wordpress.com
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Love this β€
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Thank you π
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Reblogged this on By the Mighty Mumford and commented:
AND AM NO LONGER AS BLUE! π GOOD WORK, YOU!
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Thank you, Jonathan.
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Welcome are you!
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IndeedπππΌ
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Oh, I love this beautiful little thing. Bravo
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Oh yeah, thanks , Lonely!!
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Oh so beautiful! πΉ
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Thank you, Holly.
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Beautiful
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Thank you
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You have captured the moment beautifully and with such grace your words fly off the page and into the mind as pictures.
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Thank you so much, Dave.
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Beautiful imagery
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Thank you βΊοΈ
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Lovely poetry
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Thank you π so much , Chrissie .
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magical. . .
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Thank you π Joey Who?
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Wonderful imagery!
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Thank you βΊοΈ
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Simple and powerful at the same time; that’s really hard to get.
Congrats…
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Thank you βΊοΈ
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You write wonderful poetry.
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Thank you, Syd π
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Thank you, for following me
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You are welcome!
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This great swordswoman of the pen… never disappoints.
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Thank you π
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Your poetry is an ethereal dream! xo
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Thank you, Holly. I so appreciate your awesome comment ππ€
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Well deserved Yassy, your poetry is beautiful.
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You are the best , Hollyπ€β€οΈ
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You are π β€
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wow…
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Thank you βΊοΈ
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Absolutely gorgeous
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Thank you, S.
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My absolute pleasure
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I like this poem a lot. I have nominated you for Bee Love award!
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Thank you ππΌ
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beautifully descriptive
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Thank you o
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very niceπ
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Thanks
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(i hear a song)
Asus (D5)
moonbeams dance on my pillow
this unknown summer night
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venus blooms like cereus
in an ebony sky
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a hushed wind carries
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My dreams to you
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I pick up my pen
Asus
………………………
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Thank you..let me hear you sing it π
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Oh wow π€© wow just heard you. Awesome awesome π
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I put it up on my blog. Thank you ππΌ
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What a wonderful thing to do, Mark.
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What a lovely piece.
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Thank you, Ted.
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Beautiful image … something from the Lady of the night dancing near to you .. i’m trapped by those words…tgank you
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Thank you so eβ€οΈ
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So, share those dreams……
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“Moonbeams dance on my pillow” This is soooooo pretty, Yassy. I love the moon with its pale and clear lights.
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Thank you π
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Captivating!
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Thank you ππΌ
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My pleasure!
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thought of Sirius at first, the bright close winter star… but then looked up Cereus; learn something new each day π
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Thank you π
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Beautiful in its expression of the alluring and poignant NOW. There is a deep sensitivity to the wonder at any given time of the black heavens serenaded by moonlight. I appreciate that you have liked my poem, and I am thankful to have found yours.
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Thank you very much , Michael. I am honoured and happy that you have liked my work.
Stay safe.
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Words of a writer. very nicely written
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Thank you π
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Hello there,
I have nominated you for the Liebster Award. Congratulations!! If you like to participate, please follow the link below to find all the information needed.
If you maintain an award-free blog and I am unintentionally unaware of the fact, please don’t feel that I’ve ignored your wishes or disrespected you. If you don’t want to take part, that’s perfectly fine, of course. In this case, please regard this nomination as a recognition and thank you from me for frequenting my blog, for following me, liking my posts and for sharing your thoughts with me.
Thank you, for being a part of my blogging journey!
Be well and happy writing,
Claudia
https://claudiabraunblog.wordpress.com/2020/06/26/liebster-award/
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Thank you so much , Claudia.
You are right, I donβt do awards but I am honoured , delighted and thrilled with your nomination.
This is inspiring for me. Thank you for being on my page , for being a part of my blogging family. Be well. Stay safe.
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Hello π I nominated you for an award https://madlibrarian.xyz/2020/07/12/sunshine-blogger-award/
Congrats and happy blogging! And thanks for supporting me since the beginning of my blog !
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Thank you, Phil. I am deeply honoured you thought of my work.
My blog is award free and I write because I am passionate about poetry. Your nomination is award in itself and I am deeply touched. Thank you π
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Thank you for doing what you do, your poetry is great so it’s only normal I thought of your blog π
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Beautifully and intricately woven. Adored it. I am very irregular on my blog but it is always a pleasure visiting yours each time I return!! β€
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Thank you, Vanya. Good to hear from you.
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great writing
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Thank you ππΌ
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dramatic scene to begin writing… i love it.
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Thanks , B.
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you’re welcome, Y.
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Very uplifting! re-posted here: https://grumpysgiftspoetry.org/2020/08/22/come-to-me-yassy/
Thanks for sharing. π
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Thank you ππΌ
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Lovely words.
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Thanks hey
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